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Under the clouds
Under the rain
Staring at the coffin
At a stranger's funeral

We're all alone
Feeling the storm
But not the pain
For he's but a stranger

And the graves around us
Are just there
Keeping us company
During this empty moment
I don't know where this came from. But I like how it came out.
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AnikaDStewart Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Student Writer
This is... I'm at at loss for words. So little words that say so much
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014
You don't need to say anything :)
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AzureNebulae Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Good poem ^^ I can relate, I have witnessed a stranger's funeral. And I mean, a proper stranger. We got told the wrong time to arrive at the crematorium. It was awful. Everyone stared. Have you ever been in that scenario? <3
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014
That must have been awkward. No, it never happened to me. <3
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AzureNebulae Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It was VERY awkward. And upsetting. We'd never been to that crematorium before. We didn't know if we were at the wrong bit.
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014
Well, live and learn, I guess.
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AzureNebulae Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah :3 silly grandma telling us the wrong times >w<
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014
Hehe, let's assume it was an honest mistake :)
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AzureNebulae Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, let's. My mum was not amused.
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
Hehe. I bet. It's a situation to avoid.
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LadyMurasaki1 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this poem. I find the last stanza especially powerful. Thank you for uploading this! :D
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
I'm really glad you liked it so much. :)
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014
love this
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
I'm glad :D
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
unusual but very good... :)
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Thanks a lot.
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :)
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CeridwenMerriam Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful indeed. It's so vivid, I can almost see the scene right in front of me
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Thanks. I tried to create a strong atmosphere here :)
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CeridwenMerriam Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You did well with that ^-^
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Thanks :)
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TGOM Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014
This is how I felt when my grandfather died :|
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
It's strange, isn't it?
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TGOM Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014
It's always raining when somebody dies. I wonder why.
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Dramatic effect?
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LadyMurasaki1 Featured By Owner Edited Jul 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Actually, this is a coincidence reading this comment today! Earlier today I learned that in Victorian Britain, it was believed that rain at a funeral signified that the soul of the recently deceased would travel to heaven!
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
That's interesting. Thanks for sharing it :)
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KingfisherSilentArmy Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very interesting and different from any piece I have read.
I like the second stanza, it's true that when you didn't know someone you don't feel the pain when they pass away; but I think that can be a good thing because in that way one can support those who are feeling the pain, I think this is the idea of community; to help those who are in need of it...it is ashame that this idea is dying out.
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
I'm glad that you liked it. 
And you're right, even if we don't feel the pain, others do and we should offer them some support during these rough times.
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KingfisherSilentArmy Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah I think outside support helps those that are in grief.
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Indeed, it's always nice to hear some kind words in these situations.
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KingfisherSilentArmy Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes.
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SkylarkTheCat Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Student General Artist
This is cool... So cool. I love the atmospheric touch to it
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Thanks. I think bad weather can set the right mood for this kind of poem.
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SkylarkTheCat Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Student General Artist
Your welcome, and yes it certainly can
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MintOreo8889 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this a lot, because I can very easily relate to it.

Nicely done~~
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Thanks a lot :)
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014   Writer
It came out very nicely. I like the melancholy feel.
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Thanks. Bad weather gives a poem that feel.
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PaperAnomaly Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
so do I, thanks for sharing
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
No problem :)
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fleur-de-Lis4444 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
really nice.
i like it.
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Thank you :)
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fleur-de-Lis4444 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
always a pleasure :D
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Edited Jul 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This how I felt when my step family lost a member of their family. I only met him once before he passed, he taught me how to shuck corn when I about six. Not much of a memory to really miss him, and I felt like a stand out and his funeral. (Sliding a bit off the topic - I like this poem, despite what's brought to mind it's still nice to relate to a poem).
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
I guess he was almost a stranger to you. After all there was little to no connection between you two.
(Thanks. I'm sorry it brings sad thoughts to mind)
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WheresAJacket Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
the poem here goes really well. so nice to read it
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